Critique compositions


Congestion – It’s very crowded, but some thought that because they were touching the edges, it looked like things were in place and therefore more like tension. Someone suggested using the white space more as a mass instead of just a background.

I’ll definitely eliminate some of the squares to create more white space, to create contrast between freedom and crowding.

Order – People liked its simplicity and balance, but some were not sure if it was order or comfort.

Yeah, I don’t really know how to fix that… It’s orderly enough, but in some way I don’t understand, this also implies comfort. I wish I knew what made it comfortable, because I need to use that elsewhere.

Playfulness –  Some thought it was more comfort than playfulness, because there isn’t enough movement in the piece. Another just wasn’t quite sure what it was.

UHH. I guess I can make this comfort then. Not really sure how to make it more comfortable though.

Comfort – LOL everyone thought it was playfulness. Some thought it looked like a jack-in-a-box, though it needs more movement in that respect. Another thought the angles were fun and confetti-like.

Okay, that’s it. I’m switching them. I could go for a more mystical thing, like things are spiraling out of the box – like Pandora’s box, but not evil! So I can change up the sizes and make them spiral outwards too.

But now the question still remains – how do I make the other one look more comfortable? BAH.

Tension – Somebody said it could be tension (standoff) or playfulness (angles?), and another just wasn’t sure what it was. Honestly, I wasn’t really sure what it was either. Someone in class commented that the top right square could be removed because it’s distracting; the bottom left square is sufficient.

I can definitely remove the top square, but I also need to make sure that it doesn’t imply playfulness. It almost looks like it’s bouncing off the wall. Maybe I should make it look more like it’s falling, or about to fall. Like off a bigger square/cliff!

I made some sketches, drawing from the feedback I received.

photo 1

photo 2

And, finally! Here are my revised squares, as well as my old versions.

Gestalt stuff

Gestalt, revised

Hope you like them!


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